Slam Poem - Violent Crime

Listen up now, listen carefully,

I'm bringing a message that matters to me.

Young people involved in knife crime,

Sinking deeper and running out of time.

To find their real self, despite neglect,

To change their lives and no longer threat.

4,000 youngsters convicted for carriying knives,

On the streets; a fact you'll find,

Has only become worse over the years.

And it has opened ears,

To listen out,

For crime that shouts.

The media didn't give the whole picture,

It only gives a snippet,a mixture,

It's up to us the youth to get envolved,

With what our generation, the future beholds.

resplendent_fish | New Horizons Children's Academy
11 Feb 2019

I think you should make paragraphs instead of sentence then new line. BUT I also think this is a very creative idea, but not enough to get a star.
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1. noble_crab | Michael Faraday School
  resplendent_fish's comment 11 Feb 2019
  
  I do think it's very creative but also that she does deserve a star.
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noble_crab | Michael Faraday School
11 Feb 2019

Well done!You have written an excellent poem!
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amicable_tornado | Michael Faraday School
14 Feb 2019

I did leave lines however it got posted all together.
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